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As I Cry Mom.

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She says,
Please don't leave
Stay next to me,
My son you must be brave
I have to set you free.
Please go live your life
Please remember me,
It's gonna get real hard
Oh son, soon you will see.

As I cry mom
I drift away,
You say that I'll be there
Another day,
And as you cry son
You drift away,
Afraid that I forgot
The things you used to say.

I say,
Why did you do this to me?
I can't stand to be away
My own mom has abandon me
And it breaks my heart as I fade away.
Mom can I please come home
I promise that I'll behave,
Please don't leave me here
Please let me come home,
Oh mom if you let me come home
I promise that I'll behave.

As I cry mom
I drift away,
Afraid that I forgot
The things you used to say.
As you cry son
I drift away,
Oh you say that I'll be home
Another day.
I drift away,
Away from home.
I miss you mom, I'll see you soon.
I wrote it for a chord progression. I have the full song recorded and everything. It's all sang and played by me. :\ I messed up allot though XD
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This made me cry! This was so touching and amazing I just love it!
Was this supposed to be a song or a poem? Either way, I think it was beautiful and heart touching (:
Don't let haters bring you down and don't ever give up. You have a talent that not most people have.
Do you write other songs/poems? If so I would love to read them and tell you what I think!
Anyways, I'm really judge-mental when it comes to writing and stuff but this touched my heart so dearly and I believe you have a true Talent!
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